Where to begin? I think this story could have been better had there been one plot point. It needed to be fleshed out more and extended. The entire plot of this story happens in one day. Too much goes on for that to be feasible. The editing seemed nonexistent. The writing is mediocre at best and doesn't really grip you. I only kept reading to see where things were going. I really had high hopes for this because it started off great and I thought there'd be a good story here. The jumping around, grammar errors and lack of consistency kept throwing me off. I couldn't focus on what was going on and felt like I was missing paragraphs. I don't recommend this for anyone and won't read it again nor any sequels. The story isn't strong enough and the characters are flat and ridiculous. I've learned my lesson with free Kindle reads.